Was this what I planned for my post today? No, no it was not. But when inspiration cracked me over the head this past Saturday I-instead of writing a blog post-wrote give or take 5,769 words, which amounted to 12 pages long and around 3 hours of my day gone.
After realizing I had nothing for you guys, I had a deep revelation of life:
I HAD TO SHARE THE STORY WITH YOU GUYS.
Unfortunately this is not the novel I’m currently working on. And no, I will not be switching to work on this novel that I’m sharing with you today, but I’m hoping one day, ONE DAY, after I finish the book I’m working on, this book will be able to join the world along with it.
Alright! Get ready for some drama!
*NOTE: Although I do not know whether these snippets will ever make it into my real novel, I ask that you do not take these snippets. I trust you guys!
*Other Side Note: I threw in some side characters names but have not named the two protagonist’s and other important characters yet, so you might notice I never mention their names.
Okay! I won’t give away too much context ’cause 1. Spoilers! And 2. I literally do not know the context myself. BUT, I can give you this:
There are two protagonist’s. It starts off with the first snippet when the main one, a girl, falls (from somewhere and for a specific reason I can’t share but you might be able to figure it out based on the snippets) and basically almost dies.
The other protagonist is a boy (and I know this makes no sense, but just to revolve around the snippets today), after a lot of craziness happens he joins the military.
wow. I just made my whole epic idea sound like the lamest thing ever. yay me.
OKAY WELL ANYWAY GO READ!
I screamed, a ragged sound which tore the air, as the thud of her body was heard hitting the ground below.
“A coma?” I whispered, my stomach twisting and twisting and twisting. “How long?”
“And the arrow?” I asked, searching the doctors’ eyes.
The women stiffened a little. “The arrow, it was…”
“What?” My voice cracked, worry flooding me so fast it was nauseating.
The women stared over my head at nothing, and in a low voice she said, “It was poisoned.”
She let out a sharp breath, “If we cannot subdue it all, it will become a permeant, ever growing poison that will eat away at her body until it reaches her heart. And then she’ll die. …Of course, we’re going to make sure that won’t happen,” She hurried to reassure me.
And yet her eyes held the truth.
I have been accepted into the military. The General wasted no time in putting me, and a few other new boys, to the test.
The task already sounded like death itself but got only worse as I picked up the bag. It was filled to bursting with rocks. And purposefully chosen ones, as they all cut and dug their sharp edges straight through the sack and into my back.
My body shuddered violently for a moment, and I realized I had stopped breathing. I took in a shuddering breath.
The blood was gone.
And the silence.
In it’s place, her body rose and fell in weak breaths.
She was alive.
Me and one of my comrades, Ned, had been practically neck and neck this whole race, until suddenly he tripped on a random root on the ground-typical of Ned to go trip on something that wasn’t even meant to trip him-and he instinctively reached out for something to stop his fall, which was, of course, me.
The two of us went down hard, my chin crashing painfully into the dirt, leaving my teeth jarred.
“Suckers!” Royal, another one of my classmates, crowed as he tried to sprint past us. He promptly tripped over a rock and on the way down managed to knocked himself utterly unconscious on a large bolder.
“All right,” the General glanced at his stop-watch, “that was pathetic. All of you, really.”
Without a backwards glance, I whipped around and ran. Ran, ran, ran. Forever passed, and yet in no time I was there, drenched in sweat, my heart beating madly from the run…or from nerves. I wrenched open the door and wasted no time in making my way down the hall. And then, I reached her door.
Wow,” I breathed.
Kenzie smiled, “I know. I’m amazing, aren’t I?”
And on THAT note, we shall end here!
So, biggest most important question of all is: are you able to talk in cursive?
Okay just kidding
but not really ’cause I wanna know the answer now
ANYWAYS,
Would you read a book like this?
Which snippet was your favorite? I know there’s not a lot of context, but I’m kinda loving the one where they all tripped.
Oh my gosh! Sounds amazing!!! 😁
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Thanks so much, Amelia!!
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Sounds so cool!! I wish I would continue on at least one of my stories..
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Thanks, Rayna!! Ahh I feel you, it’s so hard to pick one and then to stick with it to the end
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Especially the ending it part 🙄
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DEFINITELY the ending part 😂
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Hi! This is my first time on your site and it looks awesome so I subscribed. I LOVE sites with lots of writing tips! I can always use those, so I know I’ll enjoy this. 🙂
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Hi there!! Aw thank you! Ooh awesome, I hope you find this site helpful for you 😊
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Hey, Joy Caroline!!!!! Yep, Mary, she came from my site!!!!!!! Just in case you might find that interesting!
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Ooh yay, thank you Maggie!!!
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Do I love it? OF COURSE THIS IS LIKE GENIUS AND BRILLIANT AND THOUGH I HAVE NOT REALLY MUCH OF AN IDEA WHAT IS GOING ON I MUST READ MORE!!!!!!!!!! *takes deep breaths* But…yeah, I REALLY wanna read more, Mary. *reaching for the book and whatever hidden knowledge of it that Mary won’t give us* And, Y E S THE ONE WHERE THEY ALL FELL DOWN WAS THE BEST!!!!!!!!!!! It better stay in the final draft of things.
And, we’ve gotta name your characters, so let’s go with Boy 1 and Girl 0.1. I think those names are fitting for now. XD 😆😆
Also, I’m gonna shamefully admit that I’m sooo close to being able to write my name in cursive, but that’s all I’ve got. What about you?
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THANK YOU SO MUCH MAGGIE AND AHH I KNOW THERE’S LIKE NO CONTEXT SORRY!!! *takes a huge breath too* Hehehehe…*slowly drags books away* Just kidding 😆 I would totally share more but there’s not too much to more to say ’cause I just came up with this on Saturday 😂 You probably picked it up off of the snippets but I was thinking the two characters might have a cool friendship and possibly something more but I’ve never written the ‘more’ part before so we’ll see 😂
OOOH, Maggie that is GENUIS *cries into tissues* couldn’t have done it without you.
Ooh that’s good!! Actually, my mom taught me when I was really young to write in cursive so I do know how, I just don’t do it very often except in like cards. When we’re in a certain grade she would actually have some of us write all our school-work in cursive, but because I was so slow and careful it took too long so I was able to bypass that 😂 (sorry wow this turned into a long reply about the secrets of my childhood LOL)
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Well, when you get more I WANT TO SEE IT!!!!!!!! You can’t let me live in this suspense forever!!!!! Ooooh, I LOVE writing the “more” part!!!!! XD As long as it stays totally clean and all. I’m sure you’ll do GREAT at it!!!!!!!!
I KNOW!! So genius!!!! *dabs eyes with tissues* That’s right!! And don’t you forget my amazing naming abilities! 👍
Hehehe…no that’s fine. The secrets of your childhood, so inspiring!! XD My mom tried to teach me cursive, but I just kind of never caught on to it all.
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Okay sure!!! If I think of anything epic I shall let you know 😆 Yess I’m excited to try it!! I might even tie it into the book I’m writing right now but who knows! Oh for sure, always clean 👍 Thanks, Maggie!!
SO genius! Hehehe now I know who to ask for help when I have trouble with names 😝
LOL so glad they’re inspiring! Agh, I feel you. I can do cursive but it looks so weird 😂
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These snippets were fantastic, Mary!!! And yes, I, too, loved the one where they all tripped! XD I would so read a book like that! 😀
*raises hand* I can write in cursive! We have a wipe-off board with the cursive alphabet on it that I used to teach myself when I was around 10 or 12. I generally write in cursive all the time now unless I have to write in print for reasons. 😉
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Thanks so much, Jen!!! Ahh yes, I love that one 😆 Thank you!! I hope one day this book can happen!
OoOoO that’s awesome!! Wowww I totally admire that, I have no patience at all to write in cursive all the time 😂 That’s really cool!!
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^_^ I hope so too!!!
Haha, thanks, though I should probably tell you that even though I write in cursive a lot, it doesn’t mean my handwriting is very neat. XP I don’t have pretty handwriting. 😉
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lol I definitely get that 😆 My cursive is kind of weird looking and my regular handwriting looks very kid-ish 😂
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Well, if anyone could talk in cursive, it would be British people. 🧐
Interesting snippets! 😃
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Haha…somehow I can see that 😆
Thanks!
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